Mrs. Bowles turned off the parlor walls. She sat in the black room for a moment. The sweet silence rang in her ears just as Montag's words did."Go home and think of your first husband divorced and your second husband killed in a jet and your third husband blowing his brains out..." Montag had told her to think about them. And she did. She tried to think of her first husband, her second husband, her third husband and all of the abortions and her kids. Mrs. Bowles tried to think about all of this but she couldn't. She couldn't remember the name of her first husband, what her second husband had looked like, when she met her third husband. All of these thoughts flashed through her head as she lay back on the couch, her heart beating furiously in her chest. Why couldn't she remember? What had prevented her from all of this? These thoughts all flashed through her head as she drifted into unconsciousness on the couch.
The next morning she rose to the sound of the parlor walls all blaring around her. She yawned. Glancing around, she looked for her Seashells. Maybe she had left them at Mildred's house. A cold feeling tingled down her spine. Hadn't something happened at Mildred's last night? Mrs. Bowles instantly dismissed the feeling, all they ever did was watch the parlor walls anyway. She sighed and pressed a button on the wall causing a robotic arm to pop out of the wall and begin to make her some toast. She settled down on the couch, once again waiting to talk to her 'family'. She smiled. It's good to have a family, she thought.
I loved the way you expressed how Mrs.Bowles actions were after Montag read the book. You put a lot of detail into this and I could actually picture what was happening to Mrs.Bowles at that time.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how much detail you put into the setting which really helped the visualization. I also liked how at the end Mrs. Bowles completely forgot about everything that happened last night.
ReplyDeleteI like how you chose to do this in 3rd person to keep the author's writing style. It flows very nicely from one event to the next. Good job. Allison says hi:)
ReplyDeleteGreat post Alex! Your narrative is so much different from mine and I love the path you took with it. I did not think of it in the same way! This was very good and makes the reader think! I like how you showed Mrs. Bowels forgetting what happened!
ReplyDeleteThat was a great narrative Alex. Good job using vocabulary from the actual book.
ReplyDeleteThis was a great post! I really enjoyed how you described the confusion and mixed emotions of Mrs. Bowles. You also developed the character very well. The post was very well thought out and thorough and I could really see that you tried to imitate Bradbury's style. I also like how you played off of some of the ideas that some of us may have over looked in the reading and made them a bigger part in the story. I can't wait to see what your future posts hold, keep up the good work!
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